Medieval Times was way fun. It was a arena where knights on horseback fought each other and did equestrian competitions while you got to watch and eat. The first thing was the introduction where each knight was announced. They put you in a color section and those were the knights that you cheered for. We were in the black and white section and the knight that we were cheering for was wearing a red cross with black and white checkered armor and cloak. The other colors were red, blue, yellow, red and yellow, and green. The next thing was where the King rode on a horse and had the squires come out and hold the different banners. Then, when all the knights rode away, it became dark and it showed the prince getting kidnapped. There was a horse show after that and the horses did different battle movements. Then, they had a person with a falcon on her wrist come in and the falcon flew over everybody's head and when she threw a weight up into the air, the falcon caught it and landed. Then, came the part where the knights fought each other. First, they had the two people on horseback and when one fell off the other would jump down and continue the fight. They first fought with two swords and then when someone lost his, a squire would give him another weapon such as a flail or a mace. Then, someone would grow tired or make a mistake and be "killed". That's what happened and then our knight "killed" the red and yellow. When he was cheering, the evil Green knight came and attacked him so he stumbled into the fog. Then, the greens brought out the kidnapped prince and were going to kill him. But, the black and white knight came and cut the prince free and they fought the evil knight and his henchmen. The chekered knight (the black and white) "killed" many of the henchmen before taking on the Green knight. The Green knight grabbed a sword from one henchman (who was subsequently "killed") and fought the prince. It was two good guys versus one evil guy plus four henchmen. The checkered knight fought the henchmen while the prince battled the evil knight. Soon, the both only had one sword each. Then, the evil knight punched the prince and knocked him down. Then, the checkered knight came over and knocked the green knight down and his sword flew away. "Loyalty or death!" shouted the king. The green knight hesitated and then roared "RAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" And tried to push the checkered knight away but got killed. it was avery good show and most times, I was shivering with excitement. I hope to DEFINATELY go again.
Fascinating! Very well written.
ReplyDeleteI think you could achieve more if you started something like the following:
A peace searching prince was kidnapped(?) in his mist filled journey/ was trapped by his enemies ...
Then you probably can continue with:
1. start to tell the knights story, and at the end point out this was a show; or
2. introduce the audience and point out this is a show, then continue with the knights story;
This starting will put readers in a scenario, they are forced to image what happened next.
Another way to improve is using several paragraphs.
I can tell clearly the show impress you so much, that you did not mention the food or the way the food was served at all.
Very good one.